Journal 7/21

Journal 7/21

Today we are learning about how to simplify our sentences. I do not like because when you write active sentence, you have to write more. Also I got my paper back the first assignment. The teacher was very generous with my grade. I know my grammar is very bad. I am still working on it. I will turn in the other paper next week 150 points. I am little concern. I will miss Wednesday class, it is going to be a disadvantage for me

Journal 7/21

Journal 7/21

Today we are learning about how to simplify our sentences. I do not like because when you write active sentence, you have to write more. Also I got my paper back the first assignment. The teacher was very generous with my grade. I know my grammar is very bad. I am still working on it. I will turn in the other paper next week 150 points. I am little concern. I will miss Wednesday class, it is going to be a disadvantage for me

Simplify your writing

Simplify your writing

Today we learn about how to use passive and active wordiness. Also we did twelve examples from the book.

Active   vs   Passive

Wordy         2^nd,                   1^st

Never use you, we use, we, us, ours.

They, them 3rd

Example:  The decayed tree had to be cut to prepare the backyard for the New Year party. (Passive)

                   The garner had to cut the decayed tree.  (Active)

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Many ideas come to my mind but now there is only one left inside of my head and that is why is she not smiling. #Mona Lisa

7/16 journal

Today we talked about how affect the technology in our life. It was a very good topic. Everybody commented that some many people use Facebook to post their personals problems. Also we talked about how much our kids expend time using computers or phone. Some many things to learn about these topic because it has negative and positive sides.

Thesis from your topic

We are practicing our thesis from our topic

According to GPS tracking system, the GPS is very useful in many situations. It  Helps to many people, For example Hikers, research  biologist, Skiers, natural disaster, police, business, help parents and help the departments of 911 to find people. Also helps to use in personal uses.

For example: GPS tracking devices are used more often with police and emergency calls. This technology helps them to monitor the activities of criminals and to have evidence to arrest them. For example in New York there was a thief who was stealing painkillers in different pharmacies. The police had to put GPS tracking device in decoy bottle to be able to catch the thief. With efficiently the police arrested the criminal that already had record of sexual abuse and robbery. New York Time. (Goldstein &Schwirtz) 

4rd Journal

Today I am back into my routine while I am thinking about my sister. It was a difficult day. But after I went to school, I felt better. I thought it would be too late to turn in my homework but I realized that I still have time. Today Kamari teach us how to write a summary and how to look in our book to find the work cited according to our research. It was fun to move to different location to continue our class. I felt like our group was very closed and connected.

Journal 7/14

Today Kamari teach us how to start a Basic Essay format

Hook

Introduction: Thesis

                Background info

                Organization à support point

                Our line

Thesis: main point

               

Body: paragraph: supporting point 1, 2 and 3 details.

·         Topic sentence

·         transition:  help paragraphs connect to each other and to the thesis

·         Transition conclusion

Conclusion: Retake thesis, sum up, and so what?

             Introduction

          Thesis Statement

 

                                                                  

 

 

    Citations

Journal 7/9 Debate

           According Adam Liptak. Some people do not agree to use GPS because they say they are violating their privacy. Others say the police violate our constitution. Now the police has to have a warrant before use the GPS. The New York Time. January 12, 2014.

              But According to Joseph Goldstein thank you the GPS the police able follow a man who was stealing the medicine from the pharmacy in New York. If they had not used a GPS would have been no arrested. This man had been in prison in the past. He was a dangerous criminal.
 The New York Time.May 16, 2014.

First Writting English 1010

                                    

                                                         

Flor McDaniel

Professor Kamari

English 1010

July 7, 2014

“Devices for Disaster Situations”. GPS personal device tracking.

             03 August 2012. http://www.tracking-system.com/ Web. Jun 25 2014.

 GPS tracking helps to give alerts to catastrophic situations such as earthquakes,   hurricanes and tornadoes. The GPS system is helping emergency personal to arrive in the quickest time possible and making the difference between life and death.

“Top five reason for GPS tracking teens”. GPS personal device tracking.

http://www.tracking-system.com/

There are many reasons for GPS tracking devices help parents making their childrearing easier. When teens have to go to a party and they have to drive for the first time with friends. Parents can monitor where their children are, because usually for teens not go where they say are going .Also the GPS tracking devices help parents save money because Car insurance companies will reduce their rates prices in cars that have GPS system.

“GPS Personal tracking System help Consumers.” GPS personal device tracking.

             03 July 2010. http://www.tracking-system.com/Web. Jun 25 2014.

            GPS tracking system are designed to be one of the most powerful tools in the world. GPS system help consumers and businesses collect information and data.

“GPS trackers provide Hikers Additional Security”. GPS Personal Devices Tracking.

            19 February 2010. http://www.tracking-system.com.Web Jun 25 2014.

            The hikers use GPS tracking devices to improve their personal safety because they like to see new places and new trails.

“GPS Tracking the Alpha Make of a Wolf Pack”. GPS Personal Devices Tracking.

            19 February 2010. http://www.tracking-system.com/Web Jun 25 2014.

            The Biologists use GPS tracking devices to protect wild life. They are using a collar that  tracks  the movements an alpha male wolf locate in Oregon. The biologist monitoring the information have more  knowledge about  these animal’s habits for the period of the year.

“Ski Gloves do more than keep Hands Warm.” GPS Personal Devices Tracking.

            18 February 2010. http://www.tracking-system.com/Web Jun25 2014

            GPS tracking devices are now in our ski gloves. The ski gloves have the GPS tracking devices in their fingertips. The GPS in the ski gloves help to collect information about the skiers, speed, altitude, and distance. The information that skier collect help them to improve their speeds and performance. However, there is not information provided about helping the skier to be found if he gets lost in an avalanche.

“GPS Tracking Bighorn Sheep in Wyoming.” GPS Personal Devices Tracking.

            17 February 2010. http://www.tracking-system.com/Web. Jun 25 2014.

The researches use GPS tracking devices to monitor the big horn sheep. The researchers are fascinate about this species because, these animal leaving in extremely conditions. The research Jackson Hole use the information to study and protect these beautiful animals.

Joseph Goldstein and Michael Schwirtz. “Police say men wore GPS tracking devices during killings”. New York Time. April 14, 2014. http://www.nytimes.com/ Web Jun 25 2014.

     

In New York City there was a case where GPS devices was placed in a decoy pill bottle. The police officers wanted to track an armed man recognized by the name Scott Kato 45, that has been stealing painkillers from the Healthsource drug stores in New York a least four times since 2011. With GPS devices the police officers were able to track that armed man and fatally shot him during the confrontation.

The bounty of the sea

McDaniel Flor

Professor Kamari

English 1010

The Bounty of the Sea

This article is about how the man destroy our ocean. Over the past 30 years. The ocean have been with more pollution. With cons-tally trash and chemical. Not just the ocean life will be die also eventually it will affect all others animals and plants on this earth. The ocean help the earth to be in balance without the ocean it will be impossible to live.

Monday 7/7 Journal

Today I am back into my routine while I am thinking about my sister. It was a difficult day. But after I went to school, I felt better. I thought it would be too late to turn in my homework but I realized that I still have time. Today Kamari teach us how to write a summary and how to look in our book to find the work cited according to our research. It was fun to move to different location to continue our class. I felt like our group was very closed and connected.

Reading Habits

Angie McDaniel

I'm not sure why kind of topic class were last week, but I was reading some of blogger and I come to the conclusion that you need to write about your reading habits.

I like to read Dan Brow book and the Twilight novels. Also I like to read yahoo news and sometimes the celebrities sections. Last semester I read a lot the New York Times newspaper. But lately I haven’t read much. I think, I need to start it again so I can improve my grammar.

3rd Journal My heart in pain and sorrow

This week my sister pass away. She was a loving and caring person. She was very cheerful and she liked to sing and dance. There are no better words to describe her. I have many beautiful memories and I'm going to miss her. With all my love, I dedicate this words in memory of her. 

Alma Luz Guzman Villarreal

1965-2014